Hello!
Well, the mixing, EQ-ing and stuff is pretty good in this track! But the first percussion that comes in kind of screws up the track a bit. It sounds weird and distorted, and mono to. Maybe you should make a more stereo basic-rhytm like that one, but with other samples for the same instruments :)
The build-up is very lame, sorry, you should really work on that.. this is like: first part, first part + second part, first part + second part + third part etc. etc.
You know what I mean. Simple beginner-build up.. And I can hear (when I listen to the sound quality) that you're not a BEGINNER. Because the idea and the clarity is very good!
I overall like this track pretty much :)
Keep it up, but improve some things ;)
Cya,
R-VeeBee